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CSpringsNSD wrote:Hoppy wrote:Broncos my bring in RG3
https://t.co/wQXjZTRvVh
I don't see it happening. Denver is just trying to make San Fran think they will move on from Kap. Elway is playing the part of the disinterested girl in an effort to get all the attention from the guy she has her eye on.
Hoppy wrote:CSpringsNSD wrote:Hoppy wrote:Broncos my bring in RG3
https://t.co/wQXjZTRvVh
I don't see it happening. Denver is just trying to make San Fran think they will move on from Kap. Elway is playing the part of the disinterested girl in an effort to get all the attention from the guy she has her eye on.
I hope we get it settled soon so whoever is the QB can start playing catch with some of the talent on this team. I will be happy with whoever they have because the team here has so much talent they will make the QB better IMO
CSpringsNSD wrote:Hoppy wrote:CSpringsNSD wrote:Hoppy wrote:Broncos my bring in RG3
https://t.co/wQXjZTRvVh
I don't see it happening. Denver is just trying to make San Fran think they will move on from Kap. Elway is playing the part of the disinterested girl in an effort to get all the attention from the guy she has her eye on.
I hope we get it settled soon so whoever is the QB can start playing catch with some of the talent on this team. I will be happy with whoever they have because the team here has so much talent they will make the QB better IMO
Agreed, RGIII is just last on my list. Unfortunately there isn't a ton of talent at QB this year as far as FAs go. I don't follow college much by there doesn't seem to be a lot of hype for any one player in the draft at any position like there normally is.
Hoppy wrote:I thought I would share one of my short stories from my Sleeping Grandpa collection. Hopefully coming to a store near you soon. Read it to your Grandchildren tell me what you think. I need the feedback
https://t.co/v8UBzgp8ss
IckyIPA wrote:Hoppy wrote:I thought I would share one of my short stories from my Sleeping Grandpa collection. Hopefully coming to a store near you soon. Read it to your Grandchildren tell me what you think. I need the feedback
https://t.co/v8UBzgp8ss
I enjoyed your story Hop. Having two daughters that were little once, and enjoyed when I made up or read stories for them, I was able to read it threw their eyes. I think this story would catch the imagination of a child.
Especially when you narrated from the animals view point. I would suggest you try adding to that some more. I know it's best to keep it short, but I will offer this suggestion. Maybe expand it to Licie's day at the fair. Where she is able to put the lesson she learned at the barn from Mary and Cousin Jim into practice, and finally get the farmer his coveted first prize. Maybe by out shining other stuck up contestants with her new found inner beauty. That would be a great way to drive home the moral, not that you didn't already. Just saying, that when you mentioned the contest, I saw that as the natural climax to your story.
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Hoppy wrote:IckyIPA wrote:Hoppy wrote:I thought I would share one of my short stories from my Sleeping Grandpa collection. Hopefully coming to a store near you soon. Read it to your Grandchildren tell me what you think. I need the feedback
https://t.co/v8UBzgp8ss
I enjoyed your story Hop. Having two daughters that were little once, and enjoyed when I made up or read stories for them, I was able to read it threw their eyes. I think this story would catch the imagination of a child.
Especially when you narrated from the animals view point. I would suggest you try adding to that some more. I know it's best to keep it short, but I will offer this suggestion. Maybe expand it to Licie's day at the fair. Where she is able to put the lesson she learned at the barn from Mary and Cousin Jim into practice, and finally get the farmer his coveted first prize. Maybe by out shining other stuck up contestants with her new found inner beauty. That would be a great way to drive home the moral, not that you didn't already. Just saying, that when you mentioned the contest, I saw that as the natural climax to your story.
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Yes that is what I'm looking for I will write a second part and call it just that Licie's day at the Fair Thanks Icky
IckyIPA wrote:Hoppy wrote:IckyIPA wrote:Hoppy wrote:I thought I would share one of my short stories from my Sleeping Grandpa collection. Hopefully coming to a store near you soon. Read it to your Grandchildren tell me what you think. I need the feedback
https://t.co/v8UBzgp8ss
I enjoyed your story Hop. Having two daughters that were little once, and enjoyed when I made up or read stories for them, I was able to read it threw their eyes. I think this story would catch the imagination of a child.
Especially when you narrated from the animals view point. I would suggest you try adding to that some more. I know it's best to keep it short, but I will offer this suggestion. Maybe expand it to Licie's day at the fair. Where she is able to put the lesson she learned at the barn from Mary and Cousin Jim into practice, and finally get the farmer his coveted first prize. Maybe by out shining other stuck up contestants with her new found inner beauty. That would be a great way to drive home the moral, not that you didn't already. Just saying, that when you mentioned the contest, I saw that as the natural climax to your story.
Hope this is the kind of feed back you were looking for.![]()
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Yes that is what I'm looking for I will write a second part and call it just that Licie's day at the Fair Thanks Icky
You're very welcome. Make sure and share the next part with me. I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with it. Remember the animals view point part.
Hoppy wrote:There is too much talk about RG3 today. Makes you wonder why. We have a week and 3 days before the 9'ers have to cut or pay Kap. Hope we can wait
Hoppy wrote:I thought I would share one of my short stories from my Sleeping Grandpa collection. Hopefully coming to a store near you soon. Read it to your Grandchildren tell me what you think. I need the feedback
https://t.co/v8UBzgp8ss
OnlyInUtah wrote:I doubt we sign RGIII myself. I think Denver will wait the Kap saga out and act interested in the QB's that are also out there until the Niners either release him or agree to terms of a trade. I'm not sure Elway isn't going to be content running with Sanchez next year and drafting another project QB. I seriously doubt Denver will over reach and pay too much for anybody that is still out there or might be.
Jarhead93 wrote:OnlyInUtah wrote:I doubt we sign RGIII myself. I think Denver will wait the Kap saga out and act interested in the QB's that are also out there until the Niners either release him or agree to terms of a trade. I'm not sure Elway isn't going to be content running with Sanchez next year and drafting another project QB. I seriously doubt Denver will over reach and pay too much for anybody that is still out there or might be.
** I would agree I think that we would do the due diligence thing and take a glance @ Mr. Griffin. But I seriously doubt we sign him because of the locker room drama baggage he brings with him ( No thanks)
Jarhead93 wrote:Hoppy wrote:I thought I would share one of my short stories from my Sleeping Grandpa collection. Hopefully coming to a store near you soon. Read it to your Grandchildren tell me what you think. I need the feedback
https://t.co/v8UBzgp8ss
** I read it also, just a couple things, brushing her mane, and princess,
I liked the story line, I think you could have seriously fleshed out the negative personality of your main character as well as the blind man. I think you could have saved his blindness until almost the end, so the reader is wondering why he pays so much attention to all the other animals.
Hoppy wrote:Norwood back for a year
http://www.milehighreport.com/2016/3/23 ... he-broncos
CSpringsNSD wrote:Bam, two more classes passed and in the bag before I even take the final exams!
OnlyInUtah wrote:CSpringsNSD wrote:Bam, two more classes passed and in the bag before I even take the final exams!
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